My new song

[undarrenworld]

Its called "Deorbit Burn" and was made by me and my friend.

http://www.last.fm/music/Liquid+Green/Galaxy

Tell me what do you think...

[holden]

Hey sir...listening now so i can comment in almost-real time.

Opening drum pattern is a little basic, and then the tempo changes and you settle into a 4-4 kick. The bloopy keyboard pattern is very busy, and at times seems out-of synch with the kick. Not sure about the abrupt ending, either.

Seems like you've got the bones of a fun song, sort of in the vein of "rez". I'd add some more layers (maybe a nice bassline, some more drums in addition to the splashy hi-hat and kickdrum) and work on the melody? Just my opinion, though. If your intent was just to make a short, loop-driven track, that's totally fine, too! thanks for sharing :)